Here is Ms Dughan's comments:
- Too short
- Incorrect spellings
- It is very rare to have a director as a star- change this title
- You cannot have Holly and Amy talking but we can't hear the words
- 1:04 empty screen as Dan has left it- cut this earlier
- Running shots- remember the 180 degrees rule. Amy and Holly run from right to left, the come back in from left to right
- Dan snatching Holly is badly framed, and why is there no audio to match the struggle
- The video ends too abruptly - think about your ending
- Overall, this doesnt make sense. Is Holly being chased from the beginning? If so, why does she stop for a hug and chat with Amy? Dan sometimes walks, sometimes runs, so it doesn't give the feeling of a chase. I think you need to be clear whether this is a chase or a stalker following someone.
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